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A short scene by Alex Giovannoli

A wide shot of a hall way. A good 5 seconds in to the empty hall four sets of feet run past the camera. After last foot exits the view camera

:Cuts: to a hand cracking an egg onto a frying pan. When the egg hits the pan and sizzles camera

:Cut: to a shot from above a doorway into a stairwell. The door bursts open three men run up the stairs and one man slowly follows behind up the stairs.

:Cut: Eggs are placed onto a plate and walked over to a table

:Cut: Shot from above the staircase down between the railing showing hands and arms racing up the stairs

:Cut: Shot from behind male’s shoulder

Plate placed in front of girl as she rubs her eyes

Girl: Good morning –to the brother

:Cut: shot from behind the man hitting door down

Man bursts open the door at the top floor all four men enter hall.

:Cut: shot from the side of the table showing the side of their heads and the door in the foreground

Brother and sister hear the bang and look at the door in silence

Male: Its time to go

Girl: Nods

They get up grab small back packs off the bed and escape threw the fire escape.

:Cut:

Men get to room 890 and kick the door open to a shot pan from the middle shot to the top of the main man’s shoulder into the room revealing the eggs and an empty room. The man throws down his cigar and yells

Man: WHERE ARE THEY!?

Two brothers ran a gang together. They ran the city everything that went down they knew about. The older brother Xavier was the brain; he knew just how to manipulate the people of the small city. His younger brother Zander was the brawn. He wasn’t one for asking questions he never backed from a fight because he usually started them. After 10 years of control Xavier grew concerned of how much the power was going to Zander’s head and why they started their gang in the first place. They wanted to stop the corruption in the police force and government in the city so they started a rebellion. At age 20 Xavier with his little brother age 18 started the Rebellion group called the Riotous suns. For ten more years everything was going smooth until Zander started going crazy with power. He began to stray from Xavier’s laws and rules of the gang and eventually started a mutiny. Now Xavier is forced to destroy the monster he created the Riotous Suns and his brother with the help of his old lieutenant Sammy Sky. But what Xavier didn’t anticipate was his brother sending a hit out on him and Sammy. So they are now on the run while chasing Zander.

There are things like the 'Gang' i might change. The city idea and time and setting that im not to sure on. BUT i just wanted to get input from you guys. Im thinking this would work better as a post apocalypse era, or futuristic era. There is lots to work on and lots to change. But all inputs are gladly welcomed. Especially the negative ones!!!

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